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Axel Oscuro
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| Subject: Caballero Oscurso (Dark Knight) Fri Jun 12, 2015 3:47 am | |
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Sealed Zanpakuto: A black broadsword kept in a sheath on Axel's right hand side. - Caballero Oscuro:
- Racial Abilities:
[/list] [*]Name: Descorrer Description: Arrancar and Hollows use special, spiritual pathways to travel between Hueco Mundo and other worlds. These pathways are called Garganta. Espada-level Arrancar can easily open these pathways between the World of the Living and Hueco Mundo with a simple hand gesture. The Garganta created using Descorrer are a lot more stable than those produced by lower-level Hollows, and allow the Arrancar to simply walk into the void created. These Garganta neatly close around them before opening at their destination. The user cant use this ability to flee from a death enabled battle. Preparation Time: N/A Duration: 3 Post or until closed Cooldown: 4 post
[*]Name: Pesquisa Description: The practitioner uses their reiatsu as a sort of sonar. By sending out a wave of their reiatsu the practitioner can determine the location of any sensed individuals and gauge how powerful they actually are. This works within a range of 50 meters. Preparation Time: N/A Duration: Passive Cooldown: Passive
[*]Name: Cero Description: A powerful blast of concentrated spiritual energy at the target. While in most cases it is fired from the mouth, some Arrancar and Visored can fire Cero from their hands, fingers, and other parts of their bodies. Axel's cero is black. Preparation Time: N/A Duration: Instant Cooldown: 4 Post
[*]Name: High-Speed Regeneration Description: An ability which allows Arrancar to heal most injuries very quickly, with the exception of the destruction of the head or vital organs. Minor injuries such as minor cuts and bruises heal right after they are caused(same post). Injuries like deep cuts and broken bones take 1 post to heal. Life threatening injuries and severed limbs take 2 post to heal. Preparation Time: N/A Duration: Passive Cooldown: Passive
[*]Name: Sonído Description: The Arrancar equivalent to a Shinigami's Shunpo.For every step the user takes while using this ability he can travel 15 meters. Preparation Time: N/A Duration: Can take 5 steps before cooldown Cooldown: 4 post [/list]
- Unique Abilities:
- Name: No Fear
Description: As a knight Axel is immune to fear. This includes abilities that induce fear. Preparation Time: N/A Duration: Passive Cooldown: Passive
- Name: Weapon Proficientcy
Description: The user of this ability is skilled in all forms of weaponry. If the user should use any other weapon besides a sword their skill in it will be the same as their sword skill. Preparation Time: N/A Duration: Passive Cooldown: Passive
- Name: Weapon Improvisation
Description: Users can use or create improvised weapons, allowing them to pick up common things such as brooms, spoons, chairs, etc., and instantly use them effective offensive purposes. This is dont by infusing one's reiatsu into the would be weapon. These can be used against lower level soul reapers, hollows, and humans should Axel's zanpakuto not be available. Preparation Time: N/A Duration: Passive Cooldown: Passive
- Name: Combat Perception
Description: The user can instantly understand an opponent's method of thinking and fighting and anticipating their moves. Once they understand their enemies strategy, they are able to find their flaw and weakness and take them down with little effort. Preparation Time: N/A Duration: Passive Cooldown: Passive
- Name: Cero Doble
Description: After absorbing an incoming Cero by swallowing it, Axel fires one of his own while returning the previous one, thus creating a potent Cero Doble. In order for the absorbtion to be successful Axel must have a higher or equal cero skill as the person who fired the original cero. Preparation Time: N/A Duration: Instant Cooldown: 3 Post
Resereccion Name: Caballero Oscuro Resereccion Release Phrase: Return to honor. Release Actions: States the release phrase then holds the sword up to the sky and gets struck by a bolt of black lightning. Resereccion Appearance: - Caballero:
In his resereccion Axel takes on the appearance of a black knight. Although his seemingly metal body is actually very hard hollow bone. He also sports a spear that is 14ft long with a black bladed end and a dark gray pole. Resereccion Abilities: - Resereccion Abilities:
- Name: Black Lightning Cannon
Description: The user generates black lightning between their palms before releasing it as a powerful beam. This can also be fired from the tip of his spear. The beam is 5 meters wide and it can travel up to 50 meters at speeds equal to the user. When it makes contact with something it causes a explosion of 20 meters. Preparation Time: N/A Duration: Instant Cooldown: 4 Post
- Name: Black Lightning Shield
Description: The user spins their spear at a high speed in the direction of a incoming attack. The spear creates a large amount of black lightning around it and acts as a shield to the attack. Can block one attack of equal power to the user and 2 of lesser power. Preparation Time: N/A Duration: When all uses are gone Cooldown: 4 post
- Name: Gran Rey Cero
Description:By mixing their own blood with a Cero, an Espada can fire a Cero with much greater attack power and speed, in addition to having a change of color unique to them. It is many times more powerful than a normal Cero, disturbing the fabric of space as it travels. Upon release, it spins like a razor as it compresses and decompresses due to the sheer speed and raw power. Axel's Gran Rey Cero is silver. The cero will travel until it hits something at speed of user. Preparation Time: N/A Duration: Instant Cooldown: 5 post
- Name: Lightning Bullet
Description: Axel covers his fist in black lightning and from that lightning he can fire many small orbs of black lightning at rapid speeds. This orbs are about the size of a tennis ball. They travel at speeds equal to the user and can be shot in burst of 5, also they can travel up to 20 meters. Preparation Time: N/A Duration: Instant Cooldown: 3 Post
- Name: Lightning Horse
Description: Axel taps the bottom of his staff against the ground and it makes a bolt of lightning hit the ground. This lightning generates a black lightning horse which Axel can ride on during battle and in between locations. The horse however cannot attack, at most it may run into someone. Preparation Time: N/A Duration: Until Destroyed Cooldown: 4 post
- Catastros:
All the powers from Axel's sealed and initial release state carries over to his released state. Resurrección Segunda Etapa appearance: - Segunda Etapa:
When entering this form the sky within a 3 mile radius of Axel will turn black and the ground beneath him will collapse, giving it the appearance he was dragged to"hell". He will then fall down from the pitch black sky in his new form. In this form his spear turns into a pitch black broadsword. Resurrección Segunda Etapa abilities: - Segunda Etapa Abilities:
- Name: Oscuro Raiden
Description: Axel coats his blade in a dark black reiatsu. He then swings his blade towards the intended target. This causes a veil of black lightning to crash downwared and approach the target, as it darkens the sky and damages anyone caught in the blast. It then dissipates into the sky. The viel starts its travel 3 meters in front of the user and travels at speeds 2 points above the user. Preparation Time: N/A Duration: Instant Cooldown: 5 Post
- Name: Raiden's Arrow
Description: Axel creates a javelin-like weapon using his spiritual power. The energy flowing off of each end in a fashion similar to flames, making it look more arrow-shaped. He can use this weapon as a projectile or as a melee weapon. When thrown, it produces an incredibly destructive explosion on impact. The blast radius of the arrows is 40 meters. These arrows are made with his black lightning, so when someone is hit with it they receive a very bad shock and a third degree burn. When throw Axel can throw them anywhere with a 50 meter radius. The arrows are all 18 ft long and their pole is about half a inch thick. Preparation Time: N/A Duration: Can throw 2 arrows before cooldown Cooldown: 5 post
- Name: Knight's Law
Description: The user slowly over a period of 3 post slowly releases reiatsu into the air so that lightning may form and build up in the sky. As the 3 post goes on the sky will get noticably darker and the sounds of thunder will be able to be heard. On the 4th post a giant sword made of lightning will start to emerge from the clouds. The sword is the size of a gillian class menos(4 stories). Axel then raises his open hand to the sky and then lowers it, this will cause the sword to drop and damage everyone in the area. The radius is 1 kilo meter. Preparation Time: 3 post Duration: Until dropped(Must be within 2 post after prep time) Cooldown: 5 post
- Name: Black Lightning Cero
Description: A cero that is exclusive to Axel in his segunda etapa form. This cero combines his gran rey cero and his black lightning power, this creates a cero with increased fire power. The blast radius of this cero is enough to cover that of a small village(1 mile.) Preparation Time: N/A Duration: Instant Cooldown: 5 post
All of Axel's abilities from seal and initial release carry over into Segunda Etapa.
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| | | Axel Oscuro
Posts : 12 Yen : 20 Reputation : 0 Join date : 2015-06-12
| Subject: Re: Caballero Oscurso (Dark Knight) Sun Jun 14, 2015 11:45 pm | |
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| | | Arturo
Posts : 105 Yen : 133 Reputation : 0 Join date : 2015-06-05 Age : 29
| Subject: Re: Caballero Oscurso (Dark Knight) Tue Jun 16, 2015 11:27 pm | |
| Hello Axel, I will be discussing with you on your app. Anything that is out of place or needs editing will be in this color. Hope that you understand that there will be no biased grading on this application, any and all issues dealt with on this app is strictly based on the rules of this site. Now then without further adieu, your over all assessment. - Quote :
- Caja Negación:
This is a variant of the Gillian-exclusive ability Negación used to punish Arrancar subordinates by trapping them eternally in an alternate dimension. However, should the Caja Negación be used on an Espada, the Espada will eventually break out of the alternate dimension (usually within three post), due to their large amount of Reiatsu. Well I can see you copied and pasted this from Bardo's application that is infridgment and not allowed, either way the point I really want to make is that this may have a cool down but it needs a duration, resist, and range. - Quote :
- Descorrer:
Arrancar and Hollows use special, spiritual pathways to travel between Hueco Mundo and other worlds. These pathways are called Garganta. Espada-level Arrancar can easily open these pathways between the World of the Living and Hueco Mundo with a simple hand gesture. The Garganta created using Descorrer are a lot more stable than those produced by lower-level Hollows, and allow the Arrancar to simply walk into the void created. These Garganta neatly close around them before opening at their destination Much like the ability above this needs a cool down, duration. Because the range is between Hueco Mundo and The World of the living then that is fine but know mid battle you can not flee using this tactic as you agree to the PK of the thread. - Quote :
- Pesquisa:
The practitioner sends out a radiating pulse which reacts to sources of Reiatsu within a certain proximity this being a fifty meter radius, allowing the practitioner to determine the location of any sensed individuals and gauge how powerful they actually are. When the ability is the practitioner must close their eyes and entered into a meditative state of mind in order to attain the necessary heightened sense of awareness This is acceptable, This is approved even if you did copy and paste it from Bardo's Application. - Quote :
- Cero/Bala is a powerful blast of concentrated spiritual energy at the target. While in most cases it is fired from the mouth, some Arrancar and Visored can fire Cero from their hands, fingers, and other parts of their bodies. Axel's cero is black.
This is acceptable, this is approved, know that you must register this cero first before you can use it though. - Quote :
- High-Speed Regeneration is an ability which allows Arrancar to heal most injuries very quickly, with the exception of the destruction of the head or vital organs.
This needs a duration, more descriptive on what it does exactly. Know that you can't heal a severed arm in one post it will take time so be descriptive on this please. I also ask for a cool down on this as well please. - Quote :
- Sonído is the Arrancar equivalent to a Shinigami's Shunpo.
Uh huh. . .please more descriptive on what this does, distance, cool down, ect this is way too vague to be approved. - Quote :
- Lightning Body- Axel can cover his body in black lightning which increases his speed by two points, gives him increased maneuverability, and acts as a shield to absorb kinetic damage. Also anyone who gets with 3 meter range of Axel gets shocked and a small first degree burn.
Absolutely not, you can not boost stats this will not be allowed please think of another ability. - Quote :
- Lightning Bullet- Axel covers his fist in black lightning and from that lightning he can fire many small orbs of black lightning at rapid speeds. This orbs are about the size of a tennis ball.
This does not provide a range, pace of speed, how many can be fired at a time, cool down, duration. Until these are added this will not be approved. This is also more of a res ability as unique abilities are more passive than active. - Quote :
- Knight's Honor- As long as Axel's Zanpakuto is sealed he gets a 3 point increase to strength.
Absolutely not, 3 points is far too much as well as boosting stats is not allowed. - Quote :
- Cero Doble- After absorbing an incoming Cero by swallowing it, Axel fires one of his own while returning the previous one, thus creating a potent Cero Doble.
So you can absorb other's cero? Okay well first off this needs a resist because if a cero stat is stronger than yours then you wouldn't be able to do that you would be caught in an injury. This needs a cool down, range, duration. - Quote :
- Enhanced Strength- Since he is essentially a knight in his resereccion Axel gets a boost to strength of 1 point.
Absolutely not, this is stat boosting and it is not allowed, please think of another ability. - Quote :
- Enhanced Speed-Since he is essentially a knight in his resereccion Axel gets a boost to speed of 1 point.
Absolutely not, this is stat boosting and it is not allowed, please think of another ability. - Quote :
- Enhanced Durability-Since he is essentially a knight in his resereccion Axel gets a boost to durability of 1 point.
Absolutely not, this is stat boosting and it is not allowed, please think of another ability. - Quote :
- Black Lightning Cannon-The user generates black lightning between their palms before releasing it as a powerful beam. This can also be fired from the tip of his spear.
This needs a range, cool down, duration, resist, as well as dimensions of blast. - Quote :
- Black Lightning Shield-The user spins their spear at a high speed in the direction of a incoming attack. The spear creates a large amount of black lightning around it and acts as a shield to the attack.
This needs a resist as the shield can not be allowed to block any and all attacks. This needs a cool down and a duration. - Quote :
- Black Lightning Summoning- Axel taps the bottom of his staff against the ground and it makes 5 bolts of lightning hit the ground. These 5 bolts of lightning summon 5 menos grande or 5 Adjuchas class hollow to aid him in battle.
This is so over powered you get lightning and summons? No you can't have both you either have one or the other. - Quote :
- Gran Rey Cero-By mixing their own blood with a Cero, an Espada can fire a Cero with much greater attack power and speed, in addition to having a change of color unique to them. It is many times more powerful than a normal Cero, disturbing the fabric of space as it travels. Upon release, it spins like a razor as it compresses and decompresses due to the sheer speed and raw power. Axel's Gran Rey Cero is silver.
This needs a resist, cool down, duration, range, and speed status. - Quote :
- Knight's Prayer- Whenever someone is killed by Axel he says a prayer for them. When the prayer is said the person or thing he killed is stored within his zanpaukto and can be revived using this ability. When the person is revived they come back with all the abilities they had in life, only now they have no free will and are under Axel's control.
Absolutely not this is too over powered, I will no way allow the ability to bring someone back to life and use them with their once known abilities for your own. - Quote :
- Black Lightning Manipulation- The user has total control over the element known as black lightning.
This is so vague, please explain in great detail explaining the cool down, the range, the duration. - Quote :
- Oscuro Raiden- Axel coats his blade in a dark black reiatsu. He then swings his blade towards the intended target. This causes a veil of black lightning to crash downwared and approach the target, as it darkens the sky and damages anyone caught in the blast. It then dissipates into the sky.
This is an auto hit, please fix this. I will not allow that, add a resist, range, cool down, and duration. - Quote :
- Raiden's Arrow-Axel creates a javelin-like weapon using his spiritual power. The energy flowing off of each end in a fashion similar to flames, making it look more arrow-shaped. He can use this weapon as a projectile or as a melee weapon. When thrown, it produces an incredibly destructive explosion on impact. The blast radius of the arrows is 40 meters. These arrows are made with his black lightning, so when someone is hit with it they receive a very bad shock and a third degree burn.
This needs a resist, a range of the throwing distance, cool down, duration and dimensions, also remove the flames you can only have one element for a zanpakuto if any. - Quote :
- Further Enhanced Strength- Since he is essentially a knight in his resereccion Axel gets a boost to strength of 1 point.
Stat boosting is not allowed please come up with a different ability. - Quote :
- Further Enhanced Speed-Since he is essentially a knight in his resereccion Axel gets a boost to speed of 1 point.
Stat boosting is not allowed please come up with a different ability - Quote :
- Further Enhanced Durability-Since he is essentially a knight in his resereccion Axel gets a boost to durability of 1 point.
Stat boosting is not allowed please come up with a different ability. - Quote :
- All of Axel's abilities from seal and initial release carry over into Segunda Etapa.
This is considered an extra ability and each state can only have a max of 5 abilities be aware of how many you made already.Overall Assessment: Overall this application has many issues regarding stat boosting, this is not allowed at all. finally you didn't add cool downs, resists, durations, or ranges, you made your hits Auto hits. You have some changes you need to make and I have noticed you copy and pasted some stuff from another app. I look forward to reading your editing. I or another staff member will assess this once more once changes have been made. Thank you for reading and understanding. |
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